Oh? Then you might enjoy the title of one of my bug reports, concerning the ability to charm the antidote from Marek upon your very first meeting: "Marek's magically manifesting medicine mangles muddled multistep mission."
@tilly, there'd also be justification for a semi-colon rather than a period; perhaps even more so if we're to be pedantic. I agree, though, that the comma is poor punctuation and the period an improvement.
Since you love alliteration, you may wish to bear in mind that proper punctuation plus punctilious proof-reading probably prevent piss-poor player perception.
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*fixes* Thanks.
@tilly, there'd also be justification for a semi-colon rather than a period; perhaps even more so if we're to be pedantic. I agree, though, that the comma is poor punctuation and the period an improvement.
Since you love alliteration, you may wish to bear in mind that proper punctuation plus punctilious proof-reading probably prevent piss-poor player perception.
They are independent clauses so you can opt to use a semicolon to avoid excessive commas and 'and's. Nobody's English is perfect.
Good catch on the journal entry though, wow.